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in the modern world, the photograps or films is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the interactions between
people
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 are mainly dependent on sending pictures or videos to each other rather than using written words. I agree with the
above mentioned
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 notion and a concrete answer is given below in subsequent
paragrapshs
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paragraphs
.
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the
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technological advancement is accelerating with time
people
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 are
also
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 shifting from outdated technologies. For
an
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instance , 2020 was the year in which the usage
on
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this
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applications like
snapchap
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Snapchat
 and
tik tok
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TikTok
 have increased which run solely on using pictures and films.
Moreover
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,
contemporary
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the contemporary
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genration
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generation
are
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 more addicted to
the
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new technologies like mobile phones and they are more prone to
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themadopt
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 . As they can feel more
connecting
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 and
then
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 they
donot
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do not
 need to write long paragraphs to each other. To fortify
further
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 , using film or photographs can
also
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 be less time consuming than writing words and
also
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 as you have to write with pen and paper
whereas
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,
on the other
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hand
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 you only need
a
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 internet connection to communicate
for instance
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, In
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last
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the last
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 decade usage on
internet
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the internet
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 for using pictures and films are tremendously high which showcase the upward trend.
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, in bygone days
people
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use
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 to send
hand written
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handwritten
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 letters to each other ,
however
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,
people
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 not only shifted from writing letters but
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fells
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feels
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 more tech
savy
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savvy
 if they use
picture
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pictures
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 or films to communicate.

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