In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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For decades, breakthroughs in the
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sector have been observed among citizens;
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;many folks are wretched with starvation. In
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population has increased each year, so powers have to manage societies
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part of Europe experienced a lack of
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one million
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died. So now powers know that agriculture is more important than other sectors. In the same way, if governments tend to manage the meat problems
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the world they would
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published the latest essay about
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first step is that they use
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water supply to make
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Africa because not only do they have lots of
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have starvation problems.
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, scientists will decrease the percentage of hungry people in 5 years. In conclusion, there is a diversity of
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production eaten by mammoth swarms;
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how to struggle with the foodstuff shortage so scientists have to come up with novel approaches to solve
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shortcoming as soon as possible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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