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Plastic bag, plastic bottle, and plastic packing are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do the environment? What government to sole this problem can do?.

#plastic #bag #bottle #environment #damage #government
Nowadays, people live a busy life.
As a result
, in
this
 condition,
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society has increased
use
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the use
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 of
plastic
product
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products
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.
Thus
,
use
 of
plastic
 goods people are living
with
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in
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contaminated
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a contaminated
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 environment. First of all,
i
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I
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 would like to say,
Dengue
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that Dengue
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 patients have increased in the world today .
This
 is
main
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the main
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 reason,
folk
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why folk
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 lived
with
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in
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 contaminated
environment
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environments
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. The
Government
 is able to
use
their
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its
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power
for
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to
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sold
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solve
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this
 problem. In my point of view, I am going to explain
further
 paragraphs with relevant examples. On the one hand, past era
the
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society
use
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of
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apply
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nature
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natural
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product
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products
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 and that
product
no
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was not
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 harmful to the
environments
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environment
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. Because
,
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apply
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 at that time
everyone
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everyone's
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 life
is
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was
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 not busy they had
expend
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expended
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 more time
with
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on
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 basic human needs in spite of currently living busy life
therefore
, they
use
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used
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 more
plastic
product
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products
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as a result
 everywhere throw
the
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plastic
 bag,
bottle
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bottles
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,..etc by humans in spite of Collect water inside the goods grow up
dengue
 mosquitos Because
,
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apply
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 unfortunately until now don’t have the system for p recycling
plastic
 .
This
 is the reason
in in
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for
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 the world was increased
dengue
populations
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population
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.
For Instance
: 10 years ago
they
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there
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 were very few
dengue
 patients in
srilanka
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Sri Lanka
.I would like to say,
that is
 a
ones
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one
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 in a blue moon
however
, now
spread
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spreads
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 like wildfire. Nowadays,
srilanka
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Srilanka
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 many of them accept
to
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apply
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the
use
plastics
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of plastics
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product
.
Nevertheless
, they are unable to do recycling.
Therefore
, growing up
dengue
problems
 in
srilanka
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Sri Lanka
.
On the other hand
, in the world all
countries
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country's
countries'
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 leader is
Government
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the Government
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. By the
way
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,way
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 they can
use
 their
power
for
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apply
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the settle
this
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this problem
these problems
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problems
.
For instance
, At
this
 time
Srilanka
 the
government
 very nicely controlled
this
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this problem
these problems
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problems
. They
are bring
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are bringing
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 new rules and only recycling items were allowed to be sold. Because of that above I mention
government
 used their
power
 are able to
sold
Verb problem
solve
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this
 problem.
To
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In
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 conclusion, plastics
doing
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do
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 many of damage to the environment. and The
government
use
 their
power
 can
controlled
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control
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this
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this problem
these problems
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problems
.
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