You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the hank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will he charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect.  Write a letter to the bank. Explain what has happened and say what you would like them to do about it.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I have been a loyal banking customer at your

bank

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. I am writing

this

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letter

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to bring

into

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your notice

about

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apply

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letter

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that I

had

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apply

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received from your

bank

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informing me

about

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that

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$240

overdrawn

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was overdrawn

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and being imposed $70 charges. I had been staying in a rented apartment and the

bank

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was clearly given standing instructions. Recently my house was changed to a new locality and the same was notified to the

bank

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authorities. I was issued a written acknowledgement

letter

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bearing reference # 293761 with the same. I believe that the rental charges have been debited again reflecting an overdraw of 240 dollars.

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, I request you to re-check the error

occurred

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that occurred

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and cancel the charges.

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to that, I would want you to send a formal

letter

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about

this

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incident to my old owner so that he can deposit the amount into my

bank

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. Thanking you. Yours sincerely, Janie Roy.

yusra.f.jafferMon Sep 04 2023

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

155 words

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discrepancy
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