In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, a lot of nations of
population
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the population
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have long
lives
more
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apply
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than
the
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in the
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past. Some
people
argue that
the
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apply
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long
lives
bring problems for countries. Others the long
lives
create
postive
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positive
effect for society and many older
people
. I strongly believe that a lot of
people
's long
lives
are negative for
sociaty
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society
environmemt
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environment
. On the one hand, the elderly
people
had many
experience
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experiences
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. Knowledge
form
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from
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the experience
are
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is
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useful for my hometown. Because
,
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their knowledge is very
deeply
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deep
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and
widely
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like
library
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a library
the library
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.
Also
, they work
to
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too
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hard for
hometown
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their hometown
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.
For example
, they are cleaning to walkroad and
bou
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bus
stop every morning. And, They are
petrolling
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patrolling
to near the schools, like
corss
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cross
road
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roads
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or dangerous areas.
The
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working
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is necessary for my hometown.
on
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the other hand,the elderly
people
working are not volanteer. They
recived
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received
money.The government pay for their
working
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work
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. The money is our
tax
. If the
elderly
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number of elderly
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people
are increase
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increases
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. the nation's
tax
would span to their cost
increasing
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increase
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.
Becasue
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Because
, they most do not have jobs and they do not pay to
tax
. So, many
countires's
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countries'
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tax
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taxes
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do not
possible
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possibly
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used
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use
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more important
such
like
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as
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for
chidren
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children
and for
alone
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their alone
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mother.
Also
,
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the country
a country
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country
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countryside
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side
which was leaving younger
people
after
lives
a lot of elderly
people
more
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apply
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than
cities
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in cities
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. That
bring
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brings
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problem
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the problem
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of
enblanced
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enhanced
development between cities and
country
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countryside
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side
. The
country
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countryside
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side
do
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does
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not increase the population.That will bring more severe
problem
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problems
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. The
country
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countryside
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side
do
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does
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not care for
thier
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their
villages.
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Because
, the
country
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countryside
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side
do not
working
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work
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people
. In conclusion, the mentioned the above,
the
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apply
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elderly
people
increasing will
led
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lead
be led
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to many
sociaty
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social
problem
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problems
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. In many countries would need to prepare
to
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for
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the
problem
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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