The graph compares the sales of different music formats from 1994 to 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph compares the sales of different music formats from 1994 to 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
sales
volume of 3 different
music
formats in the US from 1994 to 2006.
Overall
, it is
clearly
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clear
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that
music
sales
of
CDs
and
Cassettes
reduced
while
that of digital
music
increased.
In addition
, digital
music
became the most popular
music
format in 2006. In 1994,
CDs
sales
numbers started at roughly 450
million
before
peaked
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peaking
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at 800
million
in 2000.
In contrast
, in the same period, the figures
of
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for
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Cassettes
also
started at 400
million
then
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and then
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hit a trough at nearly 100
million
. The
numbers
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number
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of digital
music
remained constant at around 5
million
. From 2000 to 2006,
CDs
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sales
volume experienced a slump from its peak to only 300
million
.
Similarly
, there was a gradual decline from 100
million
to nearly 5
million
of
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in
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Cassettes
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sales
volume.
However
, the figures
of
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digital
music
showed a slight climb from around 5
million
to 10
million
before overtook that of
cassettes
in 2002 and that of
CDs
in 2004. By 2006, digital
music
had reached a peak of 750
million
units sold, which made it become the most preferred
music
format.
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