Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making traditions aimed at tourists, others, however, believe that it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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debate between
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about cultural traditions. Some
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earn
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them. But
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that there is only one way to prevent our traditions from disappearance, it should be used
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another
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will explain both sides and give some opinions
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it would be beneficial. On the one hand,
people
like their culture, traditions, whatever they have in
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life so
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sometimes
they do not want to let
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other
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people
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because
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more
thousands
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people
visit every
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the
world
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why they are visiting one
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agent
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to follow
culture's
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the culture's
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rules
then
destroy it or at least visiting
people
have
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a tendency
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to
tach
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things especially
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would be
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another
country
's traditional things.
Consequently
,
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goverment
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government
governments
will struggle to maintain its traditional
value
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while
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.
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, now we are living changing
world
so
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everyone
wants to make
money
and display their culture for all of the
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and it is able to bring
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, around
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people
prefer
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across-cultures
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and
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their
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learn
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the tradition
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tradition
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traditions
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, and so on if they were once here enjoy being here next time they would bring friends and even
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the neighborhood
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too, it means more
money
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county
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is become
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mere
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more
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and more popular,
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and society
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start
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living easier
then
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before because of visitors.
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, if
visiting
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people
had more interest
to visit
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in visiting
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country
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, it would bring lots of opportunities like financial, and
people
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language thanks to them.
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