Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making traditions aimed at tourists, others, however, believe that it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion
These days, there is why they are visiting one
big
debate between Add an article
a big
people
about cultural traditions. Some people
believe that when we let visitors to
use it or Fix the infinitive
apply
to
earn Fix the infinitive
apply
money
from it, it can cause lots of damages
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damage
from
them. But Change preposition
to
this
time another side say
that there is only one way to prevent our traditions from disappearance, it should be used Change the verb form
says
people
who Change preposition
by people
lives
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live
another
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in another
country
. In this
essay, i
will explain both sides and give some opinions Change the capitalization
I
why
it would be beneficial.
On the one hand, Change preposition
on why
people
like their culture, traditions, whatever they have in this
life so simetimes
they do not want to let Correct your spelling
sometimes
use
other Correct your spelling
us
contry's
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country's
people
,
because Remove the comma
apply
average
more Change preposition
on average
thousands
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ofthousands
people
visit every country
around tge
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the
world
. So we do not their goalsCorrect word choice
or
country
, for
example
they Add the comma(s)
,example
mey
be Correct your spelling
may
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an agent
the agent
agent
to follow Fix the agreement mistake
agents
culture's
rules Correct article usage
the culture's
then
destroy it or at least visiting people
have tendency
to Correct article usage
a tendency
tach
things especially Correct your spelling
teach
it
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if it
would be
another Wrong verb form
is
country
's traditional things. Consequently
, Correct article usage
the goverment
goverment
will struggle to maintain its traditional Correct your spelling
government
governments
value
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values
while
Repairing it
.
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them
Secondly
, now we are living changing world
so eberyone
wants to make Correct your spelling
everyone
money
and display their culture for all of the world
and it is able to bring money
and keep cultural value long time. To better understand let me take example
, around Add an article
an example
world
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the world
people
prefer traveling
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travelling
across-cultiries
and Correct your spelling
across-cultures
across-countries
see
their Wrong verb form
seeing
live
, Replace the word
lives
learn
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learning
Add an article
the tradition
tradition
, and so on if they were once here enjoy being here next time they would bring friends and even Fix the agreement mistake
traditions
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the neighborhood
neighborhood
too, it means more Change the spelling
neighbourhood
money
. As a result
, Add an article
the county
county
Correct your spelling
country
is become
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becomes
has become
mere
and more popular, Correct your spelling
more
society
Correct word choice
and society
start
living easier Wrong verb form
has started
then
before because of visitors.
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than
Conclusion
, if Change preposition
In conclusion
visiting
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apply
people
had more interest to visit
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in visiting
country
, it would bring lots of opportunities like financial, and Add an article
the country
a country
people
learn second
language thanks to them.Correct article usage
a second
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