In some countries the average weight of people is increasing, and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems? What measures could be taken to solve them?

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In recent years, whilst developed countries have seen an influx in
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of citizens compared to their healthiness, I am of
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people
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unhealthy
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and physical laziness.
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, nations should practice good habits and governments should invest more in expanding recreational facilities in order to deal with
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issue. To embark on, one of the primary problems caused by the decline
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people
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fitness is
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following
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life style
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.
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means that if generations keep working without taking care
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what they eat and what they do,
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can be causing depression and diseases. A prominent example is
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Arab Emirates where many citizens depend
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fast food rather than cooking at home
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their responsibilities which can
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many diseases
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as obesity and diabetes.
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health issues, but
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has a detrimental effect on the population increase.
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, one of the viable solutions to mitigate
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issue is to boost people of
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to exercise and provide entertainment facilities.
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, when the authorities offer
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equipment’s
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in the open air as gardens and sea, they entice adults and
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to
paly
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sports and reduce depression. A prominent example is the Gulf Countries which afford
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in in the majority of gardens for their natives. Eventually, what can be said is that these are some of the ways
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can be introduced to make individuals pay attention
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their healthy lifestyle. In conclusion,
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essay has manifested the points mentioned above, it can be reiterated that the drawbacks of increasing
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may have a deleterious effect on the well-being of the population
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the dedication
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working and psychological suffering.
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, I believe that the authorities should
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to endorse all natives to tackle
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issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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