A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. write a letter to the company. In your letter *describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team * summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts * say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
you
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today regarding the feedback your company asked for in the Ville Marie
area
. There are two choices for us to choose from and I am going to pen down my opinion in
this
letter.
Firstly
, there are a number of benefits to sponsoring a
sports
team
for young people
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the
area
. I have grown up in the community and I have seen the talents of these young minds, and how capable they are in football. In fact, they have their
team
called Champions which they really are. These people need to be motivated to play at the state championship level but financially all of them are not equal and
thus
it would be
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best to sponsor these
children's
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and motivate them to take part in
sports
. There are
as well
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multiple benefits
for
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sponsoring a concert in the space, as it will bring
tourist
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from nearby
area
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and the city of Montreal will get recognized
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its mark. It will help grow the city to
remarkable
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extent.
This
will bring our
area
to life. Comparing the
perk
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of both, I think the company should support young generation
sports
team
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as it will not only profit
city
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but to every individual who is capable enough and motivate them to reach the higher state in their career.
Although
the concert is the purpose of entertainment
on the contrary
it would likely create
the
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less impact on
lives
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of
community
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as it will be supporting
sports
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team
financially.
Thus
, I am in
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of
growth
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of the young people
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our
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. Sincerely, Radha Desai
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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