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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the main
resources
 that the homeless people need,
such
 as food and a
place
 to live, should be provided by the rich
nations
.
This
 essay totally agrees with
this
 statement because developed
countries
 have more
resources
 and actions done by them lad lead to the loss of
refugees
' homes. Rich
nations
 have a large number of
resources
. They have the financial ability to offer the foreigner the primary needs,
such
 as a staple diet, a living
place
 and work. If the Western states refuse to help them, they will lose their lives because of hunger and no
place
 to live.
For instance
, around 80% of
refugees
 who manage to reach European
countries
 do not receive any help and they are still living in the streets suffering from hunger with the possibility of dying at any moment.
Refugees
 do not have a living
place
 because of actions done by the wealthy
nations
. Wars and activities that damage the environment
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 have been done by the rich states, which ruined other
countries
. Developed
countries
 should try to avoid hurting the citizens of those places since they are innocent. In a recent study, it has been shown, that the cause of the huge amount of
refugees
 is caused mainly by human activities,
such
 as global warming and war. In conclusion, wealthy
nations
 should help the
refugees
 with their primary needs because they have enough
resources
 to do so and they are the ones that cause some people to leave their homeland.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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