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The chart below shows the number of four different species of fish between 1982 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of four different species of fish between 1982 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different
age
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 groups and the amount of support they received from employers. The presented graph represents information on key arguments for study in different
age
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 groups and a sum of help which they obtained from workers under 26 years and over 49 years old. MAIN BODY. It can be clearly observed that reasons for studying
according to
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 the
age
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 of the student for a career (under 26 80%, 26-29 70%, 30-39 about 55%) was almost at the peak,
while
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 the student for interest was approximately on its minimum.And employers support, by
age
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 group under 26 years in about 63% and it was the maximum, its lowest was
age
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 30-39 it's about 33%. What is more both students who study for career and for interest were similar in
age
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 40-49. And their percentage was about 40.
Furthermore
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, worker support,
age
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 groups 26-29, 40-49, and o 49 did not exceed 50%

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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