The cost of flying has decreased significantly over the last decade. This has made overseas travel much more accessible. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.
There is an opinion that
government
should be responsible for the Correct article usage
the government
health
of it's
own Replace the word
its
people
which
many have the opposite way of thinking which is well Correct word choice
but
being
should be taken care of individually. I will be discussing both views and Verb problem
well-being
also
give my own opinion on this
matter.
It
is no doubt that Correct pronoun usage
There
good
physical and mental Correct article usage
the good
well being
of the citizens Add a hyphen
well-being
constitute to
greatly to the development of a nation. To be more specific, both the growth of a country and the lives of the Verb problem
contributes
people
living in that country have a concrete bond and effects
each other. Verb problem
affect
For example
, if a person's physical and mental health
is good which
means they are likely a candidate Correct pronoun usage
it
which
can contribute positively to the development of society. Correct pronoun usage
who
Conversely
, if the law makers
sought Correct your spelling
lawmakers
out
to build an environment where Change preposition
apply
people
are easily access to healthy lifestyle
Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
which
would benefit the Correct pronoun usage
it
people
and again have a positive impact on the government
. So there is a strong connection between the citizens and nation
in terms of Correct article usage
the nation
health
.
On the other hand
, pursuing healthy
Add an article
a healthy
lifestyle
is also
one's own duty and I absolutely agreed
with Wrong verb form
agree
this
notion. Correct article usage
A healthy
Healthy
way of living is a proactive endeavour Correct article usage
A healthy
where
Rephrase
apply
it
is the decision of every individual. With all the regulations and facilities to garner optimum Correct pronoun usage
that
well being
, if one decided to only live a sedentary Add a hyphen
well-being
lifestyle
with close to none
physical activities or good Correct quantifier usage
no
nutritions
Fix the agreement mistake
nutrition
then
it would leads
to the downfall of one's own Change the verb form
lead
health
. With that rationale, government
involvement in the health
of it's
Replace the word
its
people
is only a small part of the puzzle and the most important piece is the involvement of individuals in taking care of their own lifestyle
.
In conclusion, the government
body
decision to tend to the Change noun form
body's
health
of the people
in society is a recommended act which reaps rewards in terms of development
of the country but to actually build a healthy society, the most crucial involvement is Correct article usage
the development
it's
own Replace the word
its
people
proactively pursuing an active lifestyle
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