In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In
this
modern era,
all
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parts of the world individuals from
countryside
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the countryside
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are shifting to metropolitan cities for many reasons which leads to adverse
effect
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in rural regions. In
this
essay, I consider
this
as a negative point,
whereas
as
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some factors related to
this
trend will be addressed in forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, the developing cities are not having
positive
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impact
due to
the local area
people
switching their preference of living in urban areas.
Firstly
, the pollution will be boosted as maximum usage of private vehicles. Another reason,
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over
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population
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will cause the city employment difficulty which results
to
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division in opportunities
and
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lastly
, the public will
be having
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living problems as the rate of renting or buying
the
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house would
be surged
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.
For example
, Mumbai
which
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is called as ‘City Of Dreams’ because it is said that there is a chance of living passion and
highest
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number of opportunities in every field which
resulted
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many
to
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people
from
outskirts
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the outskirts
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who shifted
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there is
having
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successful and wealthy lifestyle.
On the other hand
, the rural places will be in major loss
such
as agriculture
many
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other factors.
Furthermore
, agriculture plays a vital role to every resident globally.
However
,
due to
the scarcity of manpower
the
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development and
additionally
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farming will be diminished in
countryside
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.
In contrast
, many young
people
who
shifts
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shift
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to
city
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the city
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for seeking
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opportunities will
loose
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their social,
traditional
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customs
respectively
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.
For example
, nowadays, many cities
are having
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the traditional farming method in
this
technological area
due to
the scarcity of
people
. In conclusion, the
people
who
is
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changing their preference in living in urban places
due to
the facilities and amenities
which
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captivates
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them in shifting and the traffic congestion will
rose
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in urban areas and
economy
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impact in
outskirts
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the outskirts
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. Eventually, to stop
this
the countryside should be developed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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