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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#gym #methods
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thought that the best way to get in shape is going to the
gym
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 others say there are more useful and effective choices to keep fit.
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 point of view of two options and decide the
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 decision is the better one. First of all, Going to the
gym
 is the most popular
methods
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 that everyone has known and decide first when they want to
training
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 their bodies. At the
gym
 clubs, there are a lot of training tools for athletes to practice in all kinds of training,
they
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also
 have some snacks and healthy foods for gymers and they can rent a private trainer to take
advices
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 from them. But going to the
gym
 clubs regularly
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a
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quite
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 cost and the clubs can not
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always be
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 for them to come so it would be a big problem for
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 in bad conditions and busy with their jobs.
On the other hand
,
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 decide to do something
that
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similar to
doing
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going
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gym
 but have a small difference like doing yoga, running,
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 with their own dumbbell,… is not
effective
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 as going to
gym
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, but it
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 and cheap for everybody so that they can do it regularly and saving money for important things and if they want to take advices, they can take it from the internet.
To
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 conclusion, going to the
gym
 is the method for
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is
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 rich and
has
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a
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plenty of free time so the second option is more comfortable for everyone
than
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it
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so
that is
 why I support it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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