Some people think that they can be fit by going to gym, while others think there are other better way to remain fit. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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fit and healthy is a necessary thing we should do.
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gymnastic
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is the best choice
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fitness, some
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individuals think there are a lot of
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schemes.
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for every
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group, be it the kids or adults. The gym provides
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to exercise or walk and run using prevailing machines.
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,
this
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still, others more
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are needed to stay fit and healthy. Taking part in gymnasiums can help a
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take care of their body
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professional manner. The most obvious advantage of doing
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is that these places often employ certified health trainers in order to assist their clients. The gym-goers can seek advice
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these experts regarding the diet they should follow, the muscles they should focus on, and how much exercise is appropriate for them. They
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even get a personalised fitness plan and diet regimen which best fits their body type and abilities.
Along with
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, gyms provide a wide
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range of
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and machines each of which could be used to build up a specific set of muscles.
For example
, the dumbbells can be used to train the biceps,
while
the treadmill can boost a person’s stamina. Despite the above-mentioned advantages, it is far more
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to join an organised action.
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up for a gym membership is an extremely changeable commitment. Most people go for a few months and give up never to turn again. Contrast that with participation in sports and other activities. Someone who picks up tennis or football is much more likely to play regularly for a large portion of their life, possibly deep into old age. Even activities like yoga and
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are more likely to become long lifelong habits and
therefore
have a greater
overall
impact on fitness levels. In conclusion, gyms are for sure a good method to stay strong, but the results obtained by exercising there often
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transient
sports,
however
, bring transformations that stay for longer, which is why I think they are far better.
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