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Many feel that going to gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are many communities who think that the only way to stay fit is by going to the gym. Many opinions say that lots of effective procedures can
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. On the one hand, going to the gymnasium is a healthy activity to stay fit. park can help you with appearance how to look perfect and about nutrient diets to have magnificent.
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 that, community choice to do gymnastics can do many wide range of activities
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 as weightlifting, cycling or running. The fact that activities always need a lot of power like pulling or weightlifting, they can improve the strength of their leg with some kind of special tools. Running has been proven in various studies to increase the muscle in their legs,
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 we can do some breath exercises after the training and
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 the training to reduce the risks of heart diseases. That why the community spend money monthly to take part in the gym.
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, it is much more motivating to participate in an organized activity. Sign-up gym membership need lots of time and is very complicated in many cases,
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, there are many deals or discount to convince customers. Generally , many families choose to play football , tennis or badminton
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 of gymnastics. It can be convenient in many situations ,These benefits will lead you to have a great physique much more comfortable than the previous idea. Taking everything into account , going to the field has indisputable benefits but it is not motivating enough to become habitual for most field-goers .
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 , parents and teachers should encourage the children to experiment with a wide range of activities in the hopes that they can develop a lifelong passion for one of them .

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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