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The bar chart shows the average size class in primary schools and lower secondary schools in 6 countries compared to the world average in 2006.

The bar chart shows the average size class in primary schools and lower secondary schools in 6 countries compared to the world average in 2006.
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The bar chart represents the average number of students across 6 different nations in comparison to the world average for primary and lower secondary schools in 2006.
Overall
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, South Korea, Japan, Mexico and the world data had a higher number of pupils in the lower secondary.
In contrast
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, the UK, Denmark, and Iceland stood at the upper mark for primary schools. Mexico, Japan, and South Korea stayed at the 30 or above mark and for the case of the UK, Denmark, and Iceland; they were in the range of 15 to slightly higher than 20 for the lower secondary. The same previously mentioned countries ranged from 20 to slightly less than 35 for the former and
lastly
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, the latter between 20-30 for the primary group.
Finally
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, the world data for both divisions were at 25 for the primary and between 25-30 for the lower secondary.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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