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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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There is no doubt that these days a lot of
species
 of
animals
 are almost extinct. The question is, What are the reasons for
this
 phenomenon? In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the key factors that cause
such
 phenomena.
In addition
, I will mention some solutions to overcome it. In terms of problems, the reasons behind the extinction of some
species
 of
animals
 are many.
Firstly
, the low availability of Laws that aggressively punished random hunting. The main reason for giving support to
this
 claim is that the hunters who are interested in hunting and collecting
the
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unique animal
species
 for commercial purposes do not respect the ecosystem and the natural habitat for those
animals
instead
 of leaving them living safely.
Secondly
, I believe that the huge industrial revolution plays a role in
this
in addition
,
car
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 and factories release pollutants that affect negatively those
species
 of
animals
 making them couldn't adapt to
such
 conditions. To illustrate, the accumulation of those pollutants will cause illness and death for those
species
which
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 can't adapt themselves to these unclean environmental conditions. The opportunity to save the rest is still in our hands, As Previously mentioned the government should consider the places where those animal
species
 live as nature preserves and prevent any person from hunting in
this
 area,
Hence
, the more respect for the environment the more preservation for
such
 low availability animal
species
 we can obtain. In Conclusion, the Lord gives us an award which is the animal
species
, that depend on commensalism in their lives with humans,
That's
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 means both are important to each other so the protection of the animal
species
 from extinct phenomena becomes a must for the environment stability.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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