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You have recently started working in a new company. Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letter explain why you changed jobs describe your new job tell him/her your other news

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Dear Karen, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I'm writing to you to share some news about my job and family. Do remember, I told you, that I'm fed up with my current position in the New York's law firm and contemplating the possibility to quit? So, I've
finally
 done it! I finished my probationary period yesterday, and today, I am a proud junior software developer at Amazon. I've always dreamed about something else than defend different peoples in court.
This
 job is extremely suitable for my secretive nature and my lifestyle in general. I can start working at 11:30 and work on interesting projects by my choice. It's fantastic! Apart from that, they have amazing private IT courses for employees' kids. Mark's really into engineering stream right now. How are you, darling? Do you have any news? I am eager to hear the second part of your story about Disneyland with Adam and kids. Please write me as soon as possible. Hope to see you soon. Love you, Vasilii
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Enhancing Emotional Depth
You've provided clear and effective communication throughout your letter, successfully explaining why you changed jobs, describing your new job, and sharing other news. For further improvement, consider adding more detail about how your feelings transitioned throughout the job change process, which could make your letter even more engaging and personal.
Using Variety in Linking Words
While your transition between paragraphs is smooth, using a variety of linking words and phrases could enhance the flow of your letter even more, making the read seamless.
Logical Structure and Clarity
Your letter is well-organized, with each paragraph dedicated to a different topic, which makes your message clear and easy to follow.
Suitable Writing Tone
You've used a suitable and consistent tone throughout your letter, which aligns well with writing to a friend. This makes your letter feel personal and engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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