The chart below shows male and female fitness membership in Thailand between 1985 and 2015

The chart below shows male and female fitness membership in Thailand between 1985 and 2015
The bar chart illustrates the
number
of males and females who took part in
fitness
activities in Thailand during a 30-year period from 1985 to 2015.
Overall
, there were many significant changes during the period.
While
the
number
of female
fitness
members
increased over time,
this
number
decreased for male
fitness
members
. It can be clearly observed from the chart that the
number
of men who were
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fitness
members
stood at over 2000, which was roughly twice as high as that of women in 1985. After five years, the figure for men witnessed a dramatic increase to approximately 4000 before gradually decreasing to under 2000 in 2000.
By contrast
, there was a fluctuation between 1200 and nearly 3000 in the
number
of women from 1985 to 2000. In the following five years, the
number
of male
fitness
memberships was the same as that of females, at over 2000.
Then
,
while
the male
fitness
members
number
experienced a significant rise from under 2000 in 2000 to a peak of 5000 in 2010, the female
fitness
members
number
steadily climbed to 3000. But
finally
, in 2015, the
number
of male and female
fitness
members
dropped again and reached 2000 for males and 1000 for females.
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