It is important for all towns and cities to have large outdoor public spaces such as squared and parks. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people argue that it is
curical
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crucial
critical
for all countries to have public access like gardens, especially in their
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and cities
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agree with
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. The reason for it is it gives opportunities for our
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to get to know each other
especially
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our children.
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,
this
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access has increased public
happieneces
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happiness
and satisfaction. To illustrate, outdoor
places
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are those
places
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where every citizen can
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it
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without fees so the opportunity to have friends on it has increased. When
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the government
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makes gardens,
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parcks
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parks
packs
even though, squared, our daughters and sons will get in touch with each other.
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connection will increase their abilities to be public speakers and
also
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their abilities to be
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. To explain, in the Netherlands, there
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a place where children can go to it and play with each other with no money to pay.
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, her children
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consideried
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considered
one of the most active workers when they
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at
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their 20th they have become
mangers
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managers
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in many fields as
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the manger
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manger
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manager
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of Kfc in Geldrop he
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his
posstion
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position
when he was 18 years old.
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, public nature
places
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such
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as gardens can make citizens more happy more active and more
postive
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positive
thinkers. Research papers proved that walking in nature can change people's mood from a black and
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depressed mood to a light and
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shiney
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shiny
mood.
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also
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happend
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happened
happens
in
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citizens in the Netherlands, people there live until they have
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their 80th with a lot of satisfaction about
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life and they
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also
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are also
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considered one of the happiest nations. They rank 9in the happiest countries. In conclusion, my point of view is public
places
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is
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useful for
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satisfaction ,
happiense
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happiness
and interaction as human beings are social animals and they need it to keep in touch with each other.
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