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The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Nowadays some group of people argue that many crime that occur in the young part of society is because of the changing married
women
's role in the family. I completely agree with
this
 and I believe that the working of married
women
 is the main reason for the growing number of young people issues.
Firstly
 and mostly, one of the reasons why I agree with
this
 is the
time
 that married
women
 who
work
 outside of the home devote themselves to caring for their
children
.
Due to
 the high amount of
work
time
 obviously, they do not have enough
time
 to spend with their family members ,especially
children
. Even if they want to engage with their
children
's problems, because of the restrictions of
work
, sadly they will not have enough
time
. So
children
 will suffer from the lack of mother's attention and be brought up in a bad way and show abnormal behaviour.
For example
, in the absence of their mother, they consider someone else like their friends as a role model and imitate their
work
.
Secondly
, most of the
time
 housewife mothers treat their
children
 very calmly which causes them to live in a peaceful environment.
As a result
, they have secure and better mental health and they will stay away from dangerous behaviour. In conclusion, I completely support
this
 argument that the increase in violence and inexcusable behaviour of young persons is because of the absence of mothers and married
women
 in homes.
Submitted by sajjad on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • domestic roles
  • diverse professional engagements
  • dual-working parents
  • family dynamics
  • juvenile delinquency
  • societal and economic factors
  • dual-income households
  • childcare methods
  • community support systems
  • gender roles
  • family responsibilities
  • professional aspirations
  • development needs
  • correlation
  • simplistic causation
  • workplace policies
  • flexible hours
  • parental leave
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • successful womanhood
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