The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in the UK in 2008

The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in the UK in 2008
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
males
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and
females
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taking part in various sports in the United Kingdom in 2008.
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,
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Netball was the most attractive sport for
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in 2008, the percentage of
males
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playing Soccer was the highest.
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, the biggest difference was in the number of
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and
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joining in Netball. It can be clearly observed from the chart that the proportion of
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playing Soccer accounted for 25% in comparison with only 1%
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players. The figures for
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participating in other sports and Table Tennis stood at 20% and nearly 10% respectively, which were twice as much as those of
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.
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, the percentage of male players choosing Cricket (about 10%) was significantly higher than that of female ones (about 1%). Looking at the chart in more detail, there were 25%
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taking part in Netball,
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the proportion of
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playing
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sport was dramatically lower at only 1%. There were around 22%
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females
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who were interested in Swimming
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the figure for
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stood at under 15%. Meanwhile, the figures for Tennis and Basketball from both genders were nearly equal, with roughly 6%.
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, the least common sport in both genders was Jogging, with about 3%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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