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The three Pie charts below Show the changes in annual spending by a particular 1991 and 2001 Uk school in 1981.

The three Pie charts below Show the changes in annual spending by a particular 1991 and 2001 Uk school in 1981.
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The three pie charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the annual
school
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invest
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investment
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by a
particula
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particular
uk
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UK
school
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 in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
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School
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The school
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 was
annualy
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annually
 Spending for five
calogeries
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categories
calories
.
Such
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 as insurance , teachers’
salaries
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, furniture and equipment, books,
Other
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and Other
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workers
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worker's
workers'
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salaries
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. On the one hand, teachers’
salaries
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 for Spending 50% in 1991.
that
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That
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percentage
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 was more than the other two years techers’
salaries
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 Percentages. In 2001,
Furniture
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the Furniture
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 and equipment for spend
percentage
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was
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very
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much
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high
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higher
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 than
other
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in other
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 years .The
percentage
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 was 23%.
Next,
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was
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were
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 invested 20% by
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school
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the school
a school
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 in 1991. That
percentage
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 was 2001 was
than
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then
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 the in 1981 to 2001.
In addition
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, In 1981, other
workers
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workers'
worker's
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Salaries
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percentage
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 was 28% . In 1991 and 2001 , Other workers’
salaries
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 percentages
ware
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were
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 less than the in 1981.
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furthermore
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, In 2001 ,
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School
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the School
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was spending
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spent
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 8%. insurance for
year
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a year
the year
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. But in 1991 and in 1981 ,
insurance
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the insurance
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percentage
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 was
decresing
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decreasing
than
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to
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the
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apply
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in 2001. 
Overall
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, in 1991, 1991 and in 2001,
Annualy
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Annually
 the
higest
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highest
percentage
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 of money
invested
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was invested
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for
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in
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 teachers’
salalaries
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salaries
 by
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school
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the school
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, salaries, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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