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Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter describe what you like about the library say what you don’t like make suggestions for improvements. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you because I would enjoy providing you with some suggestions for improving your services. As you can easily verify, I usually come every day to the library after work.
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 because the meeting room is quiet and spacious. Indeed, each customer can have the proper room for reading or doing what they want.
In addition
, I really appreciate the new movies department, which makes the library more attractive.
Last
 but not least, the place is spotless, nobody can complain about that. I believe that you should ameliorate your customer service because it often doesn’t really inform you about the library’s services. I assume that there is enough capacity to improve that area.
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, I think that you should deliver better training for your employees regarding what they can release to make happier customers. I hope
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 email could help you to set up better services I am looking forward to hearing from you Best regards Riccardo Caboni
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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