The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production.
The flow diagram illustrates the process by which
honey
is made in small-scale commercial production. Use synonyms
Overall
, the process is divided into two main stages, including the bee Linking Words
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phase
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phase
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first,
the bees gather nectar from flowers and Linking Words
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honey
in honeycombs. Use synonyms
Second,
after the Linking Words
honey
is dried by the bees’ fanning wings, the bees keep cells clean and seal cells with wax. After Use synonyms
that is
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phase
, humans first gather honeycombs and Use synonyms
then
press the combs to release the Linking Words
honey
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Next,
humans pour the Linking Words
honey
into the sump tank where Use synonyms
honey
is heated to 45 to 50 degrees. Use synonyms
Then
, the heated Linking Words
honey
goes through the sieve tank in order to remove dirt etc. After that, clean Use synonyms
honey
is moved to a settling tank, where clean Use synonyms
honey
stays for two to four days until it is ready for the next step. Use synonyms
Finally
, after the Linking Words
honey
is ready, they are packaged into jars and placed into trucks, that send the Use synonyms
honey
jars to Use synonyms
further
destinations to sell.Linking Words
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