The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production.
The flow diagram illustrates the process by which
honey
is made in small-scale commercial production. Overall
, the process is divided into two main stages, including the bee phase
and the human phase
.
In the bee phase
, first,
the bees gather nectar from flowers and then
deposit honey
in honeycombs. Second,
after the honey
is dried by the bees’ fanning wings, the bees keep cells clean and seal cells with wax. After that is
the human phase
, humans first gather honeycombs and then
press the combs to release the honey
. Next,
humans pour the honey
into the sump tank where honey
is heated to 45 to 50 degrees. Then
, the heated honey
goes through the sieve tank in order to remove dirt etc. After that, clean honey
is moved to a settling tank, where clean honey
stays for two to four days until it is ready for the next step. Finally
, after the honey
is ready, they are packaged into jars and placed into trucks, that send the honey
jars to further
destinations to sell.Submitted by BeckyJ on
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