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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Other think there are more effective methods. Discuss both view and give your opinion

#gym #methods
There is an argument that going to the
gym
 is
the
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a
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 good choice to keep fit
while
 some
other
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others
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 believe that there still
have
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are
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 many ways to stay fit.
This
 essay
argue
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argues
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 that other
methods
 can have
better
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a better
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 effect on your
body
 and
discuss
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discusses
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 both aspects. On the one hand, there are many
of
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apply
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different ways to stay fit. Using more than two
methods
 can improve your
healthy
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health
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 scheme considerably.
For example
, you choose both skipping and
go
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going
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 jogging on your plan to stay fit can make your
body
 keep fit
easier
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easily
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 and collab with
the
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a
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 healthy diet food
its
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apply
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can be a good choice.
Moreover
, not only your
body
 is prettier,
your
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but your
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 health and your biological clock can be improved by
apply
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applying
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 these
methods
.
On the other hand
, going to the
gym
 is still
the
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a
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 good
way
 but not only that
way
 can help you to stay fit. Some people can not keep fit just only go to the
gym
, though it
depend
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depends
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 on each each person's
stitution
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status
.
For instance
, you have a fat
body
 and you decide to go to the
gym
 regularly but your diet is still fast food and greasy food
then
 after a long time your weight
still
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is still
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 there even
you
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when you
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 go to the
gym
.
Furthermore
, in case your
body
 is easy to gain grease it can make your weight increase. The
writter
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writer
 contends that there are so many better
way
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ways
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 to keep fit than only
go
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going
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 to the
gym
. Exerting different
methods
 can bring you more benefits than using only one.
And not
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Not
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 only your
body
 is improved,
your
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but your
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 health and others can be improved too. In conclusion, we should choose different ways to try. There is not only one
way
 to apply. We can use sort of
the
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some
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methods
 to keep
your
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you
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 fit.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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