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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#gym #methods
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people
stay
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who stay
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 fit should go to
do
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gymnastic
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gymnastics
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 and it does not need to have more effective
methods
.
This
 essay agrees with the
later
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latter
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 sentiment and lays out the reasoning below . There can be no doubt that
people
’s body is not
same
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the same
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 as others so
people
 have more way to choose the best for
yourself
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themselves
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.Now,
in
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on
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 more
website
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websites
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people
 can
contect
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contact
connect
 more
methods
 to do exercise and
people
 do not spend
more
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much
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 time
for
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apply
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going to
training
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the training
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 room.For
an
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apply
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example ,
someone
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if someone
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want
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wants
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 to do yoga and they do not have more time for practice , they can do yoga at home , do not
going
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go
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 to the
gym
 or spend more money to log in
the
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to the
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 lessons
of stay
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on staying
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 fit.
However
, going to
gym
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the gym
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 is so good, in
this
 place,
where
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there
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have
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is
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 a lot of
high quality
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high-quality
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 equipment to revise.
People
 can practice and have a guide to help
they
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them
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training
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train
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,
people
 will spend money to pay for the cost of
gym
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a gym
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 . But I think, going to
gym
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the gym
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do
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does
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 not fit in with
another
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other
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people
, and
do
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going to
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gym
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the gym
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 can be easily
exhausted
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. It is the opinion of
this
 writer that,
in addition
,
people
 can do more exercise if it
easy
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is easy
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 and they want to
do
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itdo
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.If the exercise is easy ,
people
 will practice with fun.
Therefore
, there are more effective
methods
far
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with far
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 greater
benefit
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benefits
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 to
stay
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staying
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 fit.
Accordingly
,
this
 essay has
demonstrate
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demonstrated
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 that
people
 should be stayed fit by different
methods
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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