Manye feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
No one can deny that health is the most important
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However
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gym
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essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion.
On the one hand, gym
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the gym
sometime
has many benefits Replace the word
sometimes
and
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but
also
has the
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apply
This
is because, when we start to go to the gym
, it may be very difficult with
somebody who Change preposition
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exercise every day and have many dangerous Unnecessary verb
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sickness
including heart disease and osteoporosis, so it is suitable for dramatic Change to a plural noun
sicknesses
people
and males. As a result
, gym
is very good for muscle, bones, defense system, Add an article
the gym
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height and it has a quality Correct word choice
and increasing
body
which look
very strong and brave. Change the verb form
looks
Moreover
, if you go to the gym
regularly, you can make one long live longer because it can help enhance blood circulation, improve one’s mood and brain function, and most of all, it can help burn very much
excess calories but it may harm Rephrase
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to
many persons who don’t have enough ages to do Change preposition
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such
as adolescence. Therefore
, gym
has many benefits and it can make one’s Add an article
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body
become
powerful.
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On the other hand
, women are known to be more flexible than man
, and they should try and use Fix the agreement mistake
men
this
to their advantage by indulging in flexibility and stretching routines like yoga and Pilates, in addition
to improving flexibility, stretching may actually boost the rate at which muscles recover after workouts races, and this
applies to women as well as
men. This
showed that methods
should suitable
for many ages because Add a missing verb
be suitable
this
will make some people
feel which methods
are suitable and have an effective fitness. This
won’t make people
do harder for its lessons. As a result
, if you do some suitable exercise, it will reduce the amount of stress hormones in the body
resulting to
better cognitive function which is very beneficial for teenagers during their stressful and busy school years for students. Change preposition
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Moreover
, yoga
phenomenon has grown dramatically over the past decade with thousands of Correct article usage
the yoga
people
today embarking on this
ancient exercise that promotes health and wellness of the mind and body
.
In my opinion, do
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doing
methods
without gym
is more effective and healthy because it can reduce stress, keep fit, improve your mind and some benefits, most of all, you won’t worry about the difficult skills and out of energy.
In conclusion, both gym
and many methods
almost have profits, get fitness but it may be having
many disadvantages like the learner should be suitable for the lesson which they choose because if your epiphyseal plates have already closed, exercising regularly won’t help increase your height.Wrong verb form
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