Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to fit others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some individuals believe that the best way to keep fit is
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going to the gymnasium
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,
whereas
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people feel that having a lot of methods to keep fit can be effective more. In my opinion, I hold the view that many different methods can
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more effective than
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to the gymnasium and will explain the reasons how it can be achieved. There is no doubt that many people always
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to go to the
gym
when they need to keep fit. Because they think that
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is the best place to do exercise
with
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to keep fit, they will go to the
gym
to have a good way.
Besides
that, there
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a lot of equipment to exercise and
also
have a guide who will explain and lead the ways to keep fit better.
Therefore
, they can keep fit longer.
On the other hand
, keeping a shape by another method
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effective.
Firstly
, it is very convenient to do. They can practice at their house without
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time
to go
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to the
gym
. And people can do
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time they want because they can control their time
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.
Secondly
, they do not need to spend money on it because it is free. If they go to
gym
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, they will have to spend a lot of money to pay
their
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course.
Moreover
, it is a good choice for sensitive
person
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people
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. They do exercise without
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with others
one
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. Taking everything into account,
it is clear that
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keep fit, but I believe that using different ways to keep fit will be
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more effective.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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