Individuals can do nothing to change society. Any new developments can only be brought about by governments and large institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that there is nothing one individual can do to alter

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. Government and major institutions are the only entities that can bring about any new advances. In my opinion, I totally disagree with

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point of view because nowadays there is democracy all over the world and anyone can bring new enhancement by their ability.

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, in modern life, everyone has justice.

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, in Korea, dwellers can vote to choose their president. In fact, the feudal system has been deleted so the citizens can contribute their ideas to develop their countries freely. The new government allow individuals to create anything that they think will help to solve any problems.

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, governments and large institutions sometimes bring improvement based on

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opinion

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by conducting research.

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, their deliberation of abundant sources of information

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appropriate developments.

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, the argument that people cannot make any advances can be debunked.

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that, many people bring tremendous benefits

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society

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just by their abilities.

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, some personal inventions come from unique

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our

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easier,

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and improve

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our mental health and physical health. Indeed,

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are not made by

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, there are citizens’

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and create many sakes to the

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, there are many

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to honor their contribution.

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the

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brought about by

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, any individual can bring new developments to our

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. In conclusion, in accordance with the democracy in

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world and huge personal contribution, I disagree

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statement profoundly. I believe that anyone can express their ideas and improve our

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