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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit.Others think there are more effective methods.Disscuss both view and give your own opinion.

#gym #methods #disscuss
Many individuals think
ghat
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 going to the
gym
 is the most effective
methods
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method
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.
However
,others think there are
more
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better approaches.I agree with
second
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 statement and I will give many reasons in the essay below. On the one hand,
go
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 to the
gym
 is one of the best
way
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ways
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 to stay healthy and keep fit.
Gym
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The gym
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 can help you lose weight and stronger.
Therefore
,
gym
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the gym
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 can help you relax and decrease stress,it
also
 makes you muscle and mature.You can go to the
gym
 to increase your muscle because you are very thin and weak.So,
go
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 to the
gym
 has many benefits and you should do it because it is good for you.
On the other hand
,there
are
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good
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a good
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way
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ways
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 to stay fit
over
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at
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gym
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the gym
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such
 as
do
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doing
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 exercises,
play
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playing
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 sports,balanced diet and
sleep
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 early.First,you can stay fit by doing exercises like jogging and rope skipping.
Moreover
,you can play sports like football,basketball or badminton.When you play it,you will secrete sweat and it will help you more healthy and have good resistance.Second,you have to balance your meals between vegetables and meats or sweet and salty.You
maybe
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 design a menu for yourself to absorb in the best way.And you have to sleep early and punctually,it helps
yourself
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you
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 grow fast and physically. In conclusion,I totally agree with the second statement
about
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that
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 there are
more
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apply
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better approaches to
keep
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keeping
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 fit.People ought to do other outdoor activities beyond
gym
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the gym
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 to make
yourself
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themselves
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 diversified,unrepetitive and exciting.
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