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In the past students did a university degree , they tended to study country .Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this development ?

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In one of the modern tech worlds in the learning sector, numerous universities offer admission and scholarships for
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 , In recent days countless
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 have chosen their master" 's degree abroad .Compared to their native place they have higher opportunities to take place their future at the next level
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 they are in the studying process.For ,example recently admission is entitled to clear the entry-level test in English language test ,
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 all pupils are taking tests easily and scoring in the good bands . For good scores,
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 the government provides good universities and scholarships to enhance their activity .
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, there is a disadvantage to cultural differences.Their way of actions and the habitants are quite different from their own formal sequences . By the
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 are in depression . Instance they seek their parents to help them their peace of mind is
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 spoiled
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 cultural differences. Perhaps the
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 are not feeding the proper healthy foods . They are not very cautious about their proper nutrition line . These many things cause
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 to be in in depressed state . In a nutshell ,today 's neck-throat competitive world . Though it seems more advantages
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 impact disadvantages family support is
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 important .If the child suffers from any problems .It should be taken seriously.
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