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Congestion is a huge problem. Why does it happen? How can it be tackled?

As
cities
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 grew and became more populated, the
streets
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 got a lot more congested. More
people
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 needed to travel longer distances to get to work so, they bought a car for themselves and used their own
cars
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 to get to work every day. Indeed, more
cars
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 and
people
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 result in the
traffic
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 we witness in our
cities
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.
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, in many societies, the rate at which accidents happen is up to the roof and these accidents act as a cherry on top of all the
traffic
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 we experience.
However
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, there are possible actions to be taken about the
infrastructure
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 of a city, or perhaps, driving
lessons
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 in our driving courses, that could help the problem of congestion in our
streets
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.
Firstly
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, older
cities
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 were built long before
cars
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 were invented. S o, these
cities
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' infrastructures are not designed to handle
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 a great number of
cars
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people
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 own these days and
therefore
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,
streets
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 become congested easily.
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, folk who drive dangerously and disrupt the order in the
streets
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 are to blame.
For instance
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, we all might have experienced a situation in which someone who claimed he was a good driver, blocked a street and created heavy
traffic
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.
Thus
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, a variety of reasons could lead to annoying
traffic
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 we all know and hate
such
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 as poor
infrastructure
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 and bad drivers. To solve the problem of
infrastructure
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, governments should start planning to upgrade city
infrastructure
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 as soon as possible and put it in their top priorities.
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, the driving
lessons
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 given in institutes are now proven to be faulty and a lot of
people
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 totally forget about these
lessons
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 when they obtain their driver's licenses.
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, these
lessons
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 should be revised and of course, taken more seriously in order to boost the driving culture in our countries.
To conclude
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,
while
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 our
cities
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 continue to expand and become more populated, we need to recognize the conditions of our infrastructures and plan to improve them before it is too late.
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, we need to accept our current method of teaching is not suitable for driving
lessons
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 and correct it as soon as possible. These are only a few causes of the problem of
traffic
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 and indeed, we need to find a solution for them before we face more severe problems in the future.

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