You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery scholl. In your letter, Describe what you enjoyed about the course Say how muchcooking you've done since the source suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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letter to you as the form of feedback, that was asked by the department of the school after completing my 2 weeks cookery course. I can proudly say that I enjoyed

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course a lot. The most enjoyable moment was when I tried to make my favourite dessert and it became super delicious. All the credit I would give to my tutor Rohini Shah. She was lenient and explained very well, whatever was asked by the students. I mostly learnt everything that I wanted to learn. Even though I am able to make some dishes that I never tried to taste in my lifetime. I still have doubts about some cuisines but I will clear that with the teacher for sure. As she mentioned any students of hers can contact her for ideas if they are having some issues with food. A suggestion I would like to give you, as I know now that the school provide cookery courses that are based on popular Asian food. I would recommend that you should add more courses to dessert. I did not find a variety of sweet dishes in my course or any other that I already checked. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Harpreet Kaur.

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

213 words

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Please outline your plans and strategies for actively participating in local and international communities throughout the IISMA program, and provide some concrete examples.

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