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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them to some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you argee?

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Currently, good and reputable
universities
 have very expensive
tuition
 fees.
Students
 have to pay a lot of money to study.
However
, not all
students
 can afford the expensive
tuition
, so some argue that
universities
 should be free for all
students
. In my opinion, I only partly agree. Making it completely free for
students
 will be very beneficial for the people and the
country
.
Students
 from disadvantaged backgrounds will be able to continue their education because they previously could not afford the expensive
tuition
 fees. The
country
 will have many talented people who are useful to the
country
 because the
students
 are educated in a methodical way and will no longer depend on other countries.
For example
, in the past, our
country
 had to send
students
 abroad to learn about weapons and bring that knowledge back to our
country
 for development.
This
 will be very expensive. But today our
country
 has developed and can teach everyone in all fields. But
instead
, the cost of studying will be very expensive, many people think it should be free for all.
However
, if
universities
 are free to all, they will not have enough funds to invest in equipment for learning
such
 as guns, ammo, probes, testing machines and standard equipment. diagnose the disease. These things are very expensive,
universities
 cannot afford them and our government does not have enough funds to support them.
Instead
 of being free for all, there are many other ways to help needy
students
. Offer scholarships to difficult
students
 who are eager to learn.
Tuition
 support for
students
 with difficult circumstances. Create contests with monetary rewards for poor
students
. When
students
 receive an award, they can use that money to pay
tuition
 and
also
 give
students
 the opportunity to strive to achieve their goals. There are
also
 many other ways,
for example
, when recruiting
students
universities
 should select difficult
students
 with high scores and award scholarships to those
students
 to motivate them and
also
 use the money. to pay
tuition
 fees. Creating conditions for difficult
students
 to study hard because those
students
 will later be very useful to the
country
.
However
, not all difficult
students
 are eager to learn, so
universities
 must choose carefully.
Universities
 should carefully select difficult
students
 who are eager to learn for support to avoid supporting
students
 who are eager to play and refuse to study. Free
tuition
 for all
students
 is good, but our
country
's conditions do not allow it.
Instead
, let's use other ways to help
students
.
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task response
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the writer's position on the issue and that the conclusion provides a clear summary of the main points and restates the writer's opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain a logical and sequential structure throughout the essay, ensuring that ideas are connected and flow smoothly from one to the next.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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