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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the total
number
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 of trips to and from
school
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 using five different modes of transport which were taken by
children
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 in one country in 1990 and 2010. The five different modes of transport were
car
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 passenger, walking, cycling, walking and
bus
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, and
bus
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. In 1990, most of the
children
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 walked to and from
school
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. There were more than 12
million
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children
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 who traveled to and from
school
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 by walking
while
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 about 7
million
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children
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 traveled by
bus
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. The total
number
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 of
car
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 passengers, cycling, walking and
bus
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 were 4.5
million
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, 6.1
million
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 and 5.9
million
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 respectively. In 2010, it is worth noticing that
children
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 who
traveled
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travelled
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 to and from
school
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 by being
car
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 passengers became the largest proportion at 11
million
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whereas
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 the total
number
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 of
children
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 who walked to
school
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 dropped to 6
million
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.
Similarly
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, the total
number
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 of
children
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 who rode bicycles, walked and took the
bus
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, and merely took the
bus
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 all decreased considerably to 2
million
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, 3
million
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, and 5
million
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 respectively.
Overall
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, all modes of transport showed a downward trend between 1990 and 2010, except for
children
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 who
traveled
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travelled
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 to and from
school
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 by being
car
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 passengers
meet
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met
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 a twofold increase.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, school, children, car, bus, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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