The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.

Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.
This
chart illustrates the number of
magazines
which were sold in five different countries between 2003 and 2005.
This
chart
also
has the projected
sales
of the
magazines
for 2007. In
this
chart, the countries are named with A,
B
,
C
, D and
E
.
To begin
with, the
sales
of the
magazines
per person in 2003 was highest in
country
A,
B
and
C
which was around 50 in
country
A and
B
while
in
country
C
, it is 46.
Whereas
in 2005, the
sales
of
magazines
were comparatively low i.
e
. in
country
A, it was 43, in
country
B
, it was 47 and in
country
C
, the
sales
were 36 which is slightly lower than in 2003. Within these 3 countries, the projected
sales
for 2007 were always lower than the previous
sales
record i.
e
.
sales
of 2005 because the slope of the
sales
was coming downwards from 2003 to 2005.
Furthermore
, in
country
D, the number of people who purchased
magazines
were
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was
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lesser in 2003 i.
e
. 18 but the
sales
went upward in 2005 i.
e
. 20.
Therefore
, the projected
sales
for 2007 were higher comparatively.
In addition
,
country
E
has very few
sales
therefore
there is no specific pattern of slope. In 2003, the
sales
were 3. In 2005, it was a little bit higher and
then
the projected
sales
were equal to the
sales
of 2003.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words magazines, sales, b, c, e, country with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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