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The chart illustrates the amount of money different professionals earn in the U.K.,
while
 the table gives information about the regular working
hours
 per
week
 for each
specialty
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. Units are measured in pounds.
Overall
,
nurse
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 is the
lowest paid
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 job,
whereas
 underground driver is the
highest paid
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 job in the U.K. in both periods (when they started to
work
 and after
three
years
).
Furthermore
, the firefighter works the most
hours
 per
week
. Looking at the details, as regards the money, nurse receives the lowest salary (18.000 at the start of their career and 19.000 after
three
 working
years
),
while
 police earn 3.000 more, with 21.000 when they started
work
, which is 2.000 less than
three
years
 later, with 23.000. In the case of
firefighter
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 and underground
driver
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drivers
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, their salaries will increase by 1.000 in
three
years
, with 4.100 and 5.100 respectively. Regarding average working
hours
 per
week
, underground
driver
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drivers
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 and
nurse
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nurses
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work
 almost the same number of
hours
, with 36 and 38 respectively. Police spend 40
hours
for
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work
, which is 15 less than
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firefighters
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firefighter
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firefighters
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, with 55
hours
 per
week
.
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