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The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.

The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
The given table shows the number of
vehicles
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 registered in the
years
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 2010, 2012 and 2014 in Australia.
Overall
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, passenger
vehicles
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 always took a lead over the period. Motorcycles underwent the quickest change in three
years
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. In 2010, the number of passenger
vehicles
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 registered was 11 million, which is higher than that of commercial, at only 2,3 million. Over the 4
years
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, there was a climb to 13 million in Passenger Vehicle registered, which had 18.8%.
whereas
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, more than four thousand commercials registered, a rise of 17.4%. Turning to the remaining types of
vehicles
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, motorcycles had the greatest increase in registration of 7,45,000 with 30.7%. During the same period heavy and Light trucks grew slightly to 10.2% and 23.5% respectively over the
years
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the ninth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the tenth paragraph.
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