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These days mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Mobiles have taken over the world, and their extinction is nowhere near. Every human owns a mobile phone and finds it extremely difficult to navigate without one. There have always been debates about whether they are good or bad for us.
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society, our lives
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 become quicker and easier. It allows us to create a network for ourselves by connecting
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 together from different parts of the world under one roof. Social
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 platforms
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 become a place for talents,help and worldwide drama, it feels strange to accept that we know about so many
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's life just by scrolling
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 app. During the global pandemic,
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social
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 platforms became a place for
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 to express themselves. All of them created so much
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 and circulated them throughout various nations, a lot of
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 brought
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 closer because they were highly relatable.
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 creation is one of the highest paying jobs because their jobs have high inclusivity of creativity, they found a community for
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themselves
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.The apps have kept our spirits up when the whole globe was locked in their homes. News spread in social
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 like a forest fire, it has done a bit of damage but the positives of it
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 incredible.
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 help through social
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 during crucial times, thousands of voices spoke up for justice and millions of
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 showed their immense support and love In conclusion, social
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 apps and mobile phones might have their cons like
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teenagers but the pros
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 be numbered. Our lives
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 become smoother, connecting to
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 has become simpler and exploring new trends has kept us happier.
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