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many people feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #gym #methods
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this
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 time,
stay
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staying
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 fit is an important thing
with
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 everyone,
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according
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 to the figure of the
goverment
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government
, the number of
people
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go
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going
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 to the
gym
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increases
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 sharply,
during
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while
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 others choose other
methods
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.
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argue
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 with more effective
methods
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.
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, more
people
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 choose to stay fit by more
methods
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 like yoga,
pilate
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pilates
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, exercise and so on. To be honest, that brings more benefits
with
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people
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,
people
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 do not need to spend more time
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 that, like
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gym
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the gym
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,
people
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 have to go
everyday
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 to get
the
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a
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 high result, but with others,
people
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 just need about
second
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a second
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 or third a week. With
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gym
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a gym
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, it is
also
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 a great idea,
people
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 can go
everyday
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every day
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with
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at
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lower
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a lower
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 cost,
instead
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 of spending more money
for
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on
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pilate
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pilates
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,
yoga
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and yoga
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 .In that, you can meet and make more friends, some
people
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also
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 find
lover
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lovers
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, some funny things. More
people
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also
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 see that
like
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as
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 a place to relax after working or studying.
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, all things bring
positive
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a positive
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 and negative side,
gym
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bring
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 more positive for
people
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 like children difficult to improve high,
it'
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it's
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 so hard to stop going to the
gym
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 and so on. That’s a reason why
people
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 choose other
methods
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,
instead
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 of
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gym
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the gym
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This
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gym
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 or other
methods
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 is
also
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 great, by
people
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 should choose the best way to make effect to work or study
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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