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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that a significant number of people have a desire to to be on the etch of their life doing extreme kind of sports.

#people #desire #etch #life #sports
One
 of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that a significant number of
people
 have a desire to
to
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be
on
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at
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 the etch of their
life
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lives
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 doing extreme
kind
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 of sports. It is undeniable that
adrenaline
 has become an essential part of our
life
. In
this
essay
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 I will look at the question of
correctness
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the correctness
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 of
this
 case
as well as
 examine factors responsible for peoples'
willings
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willingness
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 to do risky activities.
One
 of the main causes of why a
considearable
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considerable
 amount of
people
 want to feel the pressure of fear is hormones called
adrenaline
. Originally, the production of these hormones
are
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 responsible for saving
owner's
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the owner's
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life
 in critical moments.
Furthermore
, when the
adrenaline
 is in process, a person can feel a huge amount of energy running in his body
as well as
rapid
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a rapid
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heart beat
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heartbeat
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.
Although
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, right
after
this
 follows the feeling of fascinating euphoria.
As a result
, there are plenty of
people
 who
wants
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 to put themselves in unsafe situations in order to gain the moment of happiness. The second cause that might be noted, in my point of view, is the desire of
people
 to avoid boring and peaceful
life
. What I mean here is that through doing risky activities they receive a palette of emotions using which
people
 paint their
life
 in different colours
as well as
 fill it with unique and
unforgetable
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unforgettable
 experiences. The first cause mentioned above has led to a bouquet of
deseases
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diseases
 ranging from
the
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aging
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 before time owing to the constant release of
adrenaline
 to
injures
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 earned
in
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as
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 a result of accidents. That
all
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 provoked by
person's
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a person's
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 addiction to
adrenaline
 and violation of safety
creteries
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precautions
. Another problem that follows is that if
this
 person has children, there are high
chances
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 that kids will try to imitate
quardians'
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 behaviour and what they do.
One
 of the consequences of
this
 is that young minds are naive and irresponsible and by repeating
after
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their parents' dangerous hobbies, they can get injured. Having weighed everything mentioned up, we can come to a conclusion that the feeling of euphoria and a desire to make
the
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life
 more colourful
are
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one
 of the main reasons why
do
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so many
people
 are into extreme.
However
,
this
 category of sports has
detrimental
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a detrimental
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 effect on
peoples'
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people's
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 health and can become a reason
of
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childrens'
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 traumas.
Nevertheless
, it would be not surprising to see more extreme
sport
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 aficionados in the near future.
In other words
, plenty of accidents and health issues might happen and we should be ready to bear all the consequences of that.
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