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The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.

The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.
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The given
table
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 provides vital data about the amount of fast
food
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 consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future. Generally speaking, as we can see from the
table
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, the vast majority of
units
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 of
the
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fast
food
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has
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have
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 grown up since 2005.
Moreover
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, it is presumed that in the next few
years
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 the numbers will continue to rise. Upon the initial observation, it becomes evident that in 2025
humburgers
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hamburgers
supposed
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are supposed
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 to become the most popular type of
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fast
food
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 and it is expected to be accounting for 51
units
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. Compared to it, fried
rise
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rice
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 and noodles are
intented
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intended
 to be highlighted as the most unwilled choice when it comes to
the
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fast
food
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, showing only 9
units
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 for each respectively.
The similar
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 patterns can be noticed back in 2005. A closer examination of the
table
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 revealed that the most fast-growing sort of fast
food
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 is salads.
Due to
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 the
table
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, throughout the period they have grown
for
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to
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 10
units
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.
Furthermore
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, perhaps, in the next two
years
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 the indicators of salads will hit 41
units
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, making a significant jump
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of
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 more than twice
of
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its magnitude
in
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nowadays.
In contrast
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 with the aforementioned expectations, it is unlikely for
the
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fried rice to make
a
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progress in the coming future.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, food, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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