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The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.

The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
The table illustrates the number of five different types of
vehicles
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 registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
Overall
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, in Australia,
maximum
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a maximum
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 number of
vehicles
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 had registered for
passenger
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passengers
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 in all given time
period
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periods
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, whilst light trucks had been lowest registered.
Apart from
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this
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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 had maximum and minimum
changed
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changes
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 in motorcycles and heavy trucks respectively.
To begin
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 with, 11
million
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 passenger
vehicles
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are
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were
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 registered in 2010,
while
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 in 2012 and 2014 it had been registered 12
million
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 and 13
million
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vehicles
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respectively
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were respectively
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 and
also
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 18.2%
changed
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change
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 in registration. 2.3, 2.6, and 2.7
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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commercial
vehicle
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vehicles
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had
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were
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 registered in 2010, 2012 and 2014. In
this
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 time
period
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,period
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 17.4%
increased
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increase
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 in registration.
Furthermore
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, motorcycles' registration is increased by 30.7%. It had
average
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an average
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around
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of around
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 0.6
million
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vehicles
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 registered in given years. Heavy and light trucks had registered less than 0.4
million
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vehicles
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,
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apply
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 so
that
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apply
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they had changed
10.2
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by 10.2
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% and 23.5% respectively in
given
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the given
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 time period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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