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People believe that some individuals are born with leadership skills, while others think that leadership skills can be made. Discuss both views and give your idea.

#people #individuals #leadership #skills #idea
We all know that
skills
 are nothing but
an
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 ability of
one
 person to do something in
an
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 good manner. These
skills
 may come to a boy or girl by interest,hobbies,talent and
also
 by learning. But leadership
skills
 are not just like that.
One
 may have to
involve
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 completely into the work,lead other members in a correct way,
have
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and have
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a
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good vision and
desicion making
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decision-making
skills
. We
people
 believe that we have two opinions about
the
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leadership
skills
that is
 some
people
 are born with
that
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those
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skills
while
 others think that those
skills
 can be made. If
one
 wants to be a leader in a particular field he needs to be good at that , so that he can guide other members of the same field to improve themself.
Inorder
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 to guide other members,
one
 should have
a
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better communication
skills
. I believe that
people
 who have good communication
skill
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skills
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 have a great chance to be a leader.And that's why
people
 believe some
individuas
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individuals
 are born with leadership
skills
.They make
people
 engage in every conversation and other
works
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work
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 which makes them reveal their talent. But only some
people
 have that skill by birth. Others may lack a few of them.
they
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They
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 won't be participating in any activities,work,sports
and
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etc. They just do their job and go home or
wasting
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waste
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 time by doing some things which are not productive. If that kind of person really
wants
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towants
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 be a good leader he might improve the other
skills
 which makes them a good captain.
On
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 conclusion, I agree with both
the
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statements.
Eventhough
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Even though
 the person has that skill by birth, he/she needs to stick to the current world and understand them. So, both
the
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kinds of
people
needs
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 to start understanding the world and the
people
 in it to make them go in
a
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the
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 right way.
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