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some people believe that the best way to improve driving standards would be to make the drivers take regular road safety courses, others say the stricter punishments for bad driving would be more effective. discus both views and give your own opinion.

#people #standards #drivers #road #safety #courses #punishments #discus
As nowadays, some people are
facting
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having
problem
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problems
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due to
 bad driving of other.
This
 can
be improve
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 by teaching
drivers
 to take regular
road
 safety courses
as well as
 giving punishments for bad driving. On the side of teaching the public to improve
there
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their
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 driving.
For example
, the Government should make
rule
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a rule
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 that before driving cars human should
drive
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 6 months on the
road
 which
are
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is
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 made for learning
perpose
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purpose
purposes
. A human having 25 years
age
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 and giving information and knowledge about the driving standards
it
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can help in improving the driving skills.
Mans
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Men
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 who are learning to drive a
cars
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car
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 or bikes
informations
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information
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, data about good driving and skill to drive improve knowledge should be given.
Person
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 who is learning
car
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a car
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 should learn
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the rule
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rule
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rules
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 about it. On the side of stricter punishments for ba driving.
For instance
, if a man is driving
is
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in
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such
 a
ways
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way
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 that it harm other
then
 the government should
giving
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give
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 feen for it. The state should charge to those people who driving is bad. The nation should take action against the people who
have
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are
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 driving without care. Police should ask for money from those
mans
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men
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 and
woman
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women
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 who are driving care less. Police should even give punishments whose
person
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people
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 who are bad at driving.
To conclude
, the above information describes
about
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the
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both
view
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views
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 do giving classes for
drivers
 to take regular
road
 safety courses
as well as
 giving them punishment. From my viewpoint,
drivers
 should take classes for it. In my opinion,
drivers
 should take regular
road
 safety courses.
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