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Prisons is the best punishment for criminals.Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion

#prisons #punishment #criminals
I agree that prisons
is
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 the best for
criminals
 to get
punish
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. In modern society, all
people
 have human
right
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rights
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 which means it is hard to punish
people
 physically. And even if
criminals
 get
punish
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 physically, it is not sure whether they regret what they did and start a new life. Still, some
criminals
are needed
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 to
get
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be
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 punished because of their committed
crime
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crimes
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.
Therefore
, criminal should stay
prison
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in prison
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,
limitting
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limiting
 the range of their activities and what they want for a long time.
Also
,
criminals
 should be away from ordinary
people
 including
vitim's
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victim's
victims
 families ; the most important reason for
necessity
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the necessity
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 of
prison
 is here.
That is
 to say, isolation from society. But even if
criminals
 go to
prison
, there is no point in getting short sentences.
Therefore
, Time will be the best punishment for
criminal
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stucking
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stuck
 in
prison
.
all
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criminal
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criminals
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 are not bad. and some
people
 go to
prison
 because of
the
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their
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 mistake or their circumstances.
the
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The
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 law should give a second chance to
people
 like that.
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