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The Graph shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The Graph shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line chart illustrates the mean of carbon dioxide emitted per capita in the UK, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal 40 years after 1967.
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, whilst Italy and Portugal rose over the period, the other had a downward trend in
this
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 value. On the one hand, Italy and Portugal experienced the same trend, with both of these countries observably growing since 1967.
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 there was a change in both trends in 1997, these values slightly increased almost the same number since 1997 at just over 8 metric tonnes (
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) and around 5
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, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the two remaining countries are the United Kindom and Sweden;
although
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 Sweden
initially
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 started at just over 8
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 and steadily climbed until reached a peak at approximately 10
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, there was a dramatic decline in both countries; the former was about 9
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 and the latter was the same value as Portugal.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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