The two maps below show changes in University campus in many years.

The two maps below show changes in  University campus in many years.
The floor plans illustrate the changes of the
uUniversity cCampus
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university campus
from 2010 to the present day. Generally, there are significant transformations including expansion
as well as
relocation of buildings.
However
, other construction and demolition
also
happened which will be discussed
further
in the following. As depicted, there are four
Ccampus
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Campus
facilities that have been transformed
like
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Student
Housing on the southwest that shifted into the
Student
Facilities.
Additionally
, the College Office has
also
functionally changed into a Science Building
while
the Shops are used as another
Student
Accommodation now.
Furthermore
, the Teaching Block is converted into an Arts Building. Another thing to be mentioned is the expansion of the
Student
Accommodation which is constructed in three different areas (two on the East and one
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West). Despite being demolished, the restaurant has been relocated into the
Student
Facilities
together with
the Shops and Offices.
However
, the Lawn and seating area no longer exist on the recent map.
Lastly
, there is a new road constructed for the University Campus
now
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